You uploaded a video, great. Keep it up. Now for the bad news, its way too long. Longer than most movies in fact. Edit it down to 5 minutes and it will be something spectacular. Also, never say umm, in your video...ever. Well maybe if you're being interviewed? Then again, not even then. Write a script.
I gave you a thumbs up to encourage you to keep uploading videos. Hopefully, they'll get better with time. Good luck.