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Road Cycling “It is by riding a bicycle that you learn the contours of a country best, since you have to sweat up the hills and coast down them. Thus you remember them as they actually are, while in a motor car only a high hill impresses you, and you have no such accurate remembrance of country you have driven through as you gain by riding a bicycle.” -- Ernest Hemingway

Wrote an essay on cycling for creative writing

Old 09-10-09, 05:04 PM
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Any chance of an html link? Work blocks out google docs..
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I like the idea plenty well. My gentle critique would be that you tell the reader what to think too often. For example: "...cycling just isn’t about riding a bike and getting in some training miles..." The reader should *get* that from the story; you don't need to tell the reader what the story tells.
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Old 09-10-09, 05:29 PM
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Originally Posted by RacerOne View Post
Any chance of an html link? Work blocks out google docs..
Your work needs to get with the times. What's next, blocking Excel?

Anyway, good read. The story is great, the editing could use some work.

I was hoping you could work botto in somehow.
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Old 09-10-09, 05:45 PM
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Originally Posted by Flatballer View Post
Your work needs to get with the times. What's next, blocking Excel?

Anyway, good read. The story is great, the editing could use some work.

I was hoping you could work botto in somehow.
It has to do with storing company documents on a non company server. Information security and all that.
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There were some grammar mistakes but it is a draft so that's fine. I read the whole thing and I thought it was great, kept my interest all the way through. I agree with alot of what you wrote, other than why we ride, or why I ride. It's the rush of adrenaline each time I sprint, I reflect alot when I ride, about where my life is and where it was. I ride for the fun of it, I ride for the fitness. Its the only exercise that either wont bore me or wont hurt me the longer I do it. I can barley run a mile in what 20 mins, back in high school, I can do many miles in that time on a bike. Cycling is a great style of life.
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Old 09-14-09, 03:20 PM
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Thanks for all the positive feedback. Nothing hugely negative and considering this is BF I'm surprised

Working in a botto quote could be funny but besides a few one liners I read I know nothing about him other than he travels for some great rides.

I'm going to have trouble hunting down the last few grammar mistakes.
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Saw this topic, couldn't get past! In this very moment I try to do the same. I have to write a short essay about the advantages and disadvantages of road cycling. I am so excited about this work! Unlike my friend who always get high grades just by buying it in the Internet. But it's a little secrets between me and him. I'm not judging him.
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Editing good material into better material is incredibly hard. It takes a very compassionate editor or a great deal of personal distance between you and the work.

it is obvious this came from your heart--the source of real communication. The hard part is to pick it apart and tighten up every little loose section, without killing the feeling.

Even as it is this is a fine piece of writing. it Communicates. it transfers thought and emotion between writer and reader.

Now think of the reader---a person looking at this from zero, feeling and knowing none of what you feel, what you tried to infuse into the words. What question would the reader ask? Where would the reader find it hard to follow. How can the story be made clearer to a person who has seen bikes, maybe rode as a kid, knows there are people who ride bikes, but lives in a bikeless world?

Whether you do more with this or not, you did a fine job here.
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Originally Posted by crydee View Post
Thanks for all the positive feedback. Nothing hugely negative and considering this is BF I'm surprised

Working in a botto quote could be funny but besides a few one liners I read I know nothing about him other than he travels for some great rides.

I'm going to have trouble hunting down the last few grammar mistakes.


Have you done any more writing in the past 10 years since you posted this?
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Originally Posted by Machka View Post
Have you done any more writing in the past 10 years since you posted this?
Ouch .... More life wasted trying to talk to zombies ....
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I love the format of the essay. It really develops written skills, structures thoughts and makes you think. If you need help writing an essay, you can refer to https://paperleaf.ca/do-my-essay/ The guys quality and very beautifully help you with the task.

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Crap. I fell for it and started reading the 10 year old essay. I wish zombie threads were easier to identify.
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Originally Posted by crydee View Post
,,,Mainly, I want to confess I quoted a few guys here (Pcad and Dr. Pete) from my extensive reading of the boards when I first got started (the boards back then were way more cluttered with helpful threads). I was wondering how it is appropriate to quote them in this essay. I put their names from what I can tell in the article and quotes around them (and exaggerated a bit by necessary, but by reading their posts everday I felt as if I "know" them.) I Just want to make it is legit…

edit: if dr pete or pcad would say pm with their thoughts on this, this would be great, but just reminded this is fiction (but everything about me is true) and largely based on what I gained from reading the forums for a couple of years
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Crap. I fell for it and started reading the 10 year old essay. I wish zombie threads were easier to identify.
When I read the OP, I naturally thought it was legitimately contemporary since it referred to pcad and Dr. Pete in the seemingly long ago past.
As I recall, at least pcad was active here when I joined in 2008, and for a few years afterwards.
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Sooo... I'm a screenwriter. Setting subject aside, would you like some style and editing notes? There are a lot of little tweaks that would make the writing "pop" a bit more. Let me know.
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I love the format of the essay. It really develops written skills, structures thoughts and makes you think. If you need help writing an essay, you can refer to https://paperleaf.ca/do-my-essay/ The guys quality and very beautifully help you with the task.


Imagine paying someone with your command of grammar for an essay.

Keep spamming in semi-literate repetition.
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This thread wanted to die twice. And twice it has been reborn.
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Originally Posted by Nachoman View Post
Crap. I fell for it and started reading the 10 year old essay. I wish zombie threads were easier to identify.
Well ... they do have the date in the top left corner ...
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Originally Posted by Nachoman View Post
I wish zombie threads were easier to identify.
idea: board feature that makes the background color progressively darker based on the age of the initial post in the thread.

Posted today? bright white background.

Posted 10 years ago? Black background.

Posted a month ago? Light-gray background.
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Originally Posted by goenrdoug View Post
idea: board feature that makes the background color progressively darker based on the age of the initial post in the thread.

Posted today? bright white background.

Posted 10 years ago? Black background.

Posted a month ago? Light-gray background.
Black background with black print? Just making sure we're on the same page.
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Black background with black print? Just making sure we're on the same page.
Perfect. The older the thread, the more difficult it'll be to read until...
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A good topic for an essay, and indeed for a written reasoning or even a small scientific work or project. An essay is a very cool written form for me to learn to express my thoughts beautifully, competently and structuredly. Now for students there are many online resources that help them write an essay without any special problems. For example, try this if you have any difficulties.

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Originally Posted by wgscott View Post


Imagine paying someone with your command of grammar for an essay.

Keep spamming in semi-literate repetition.
Agree
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I remember writing an essay at the university, I loved this form of work, because I think that it teaches people most of all structured and clearly express thoughts.
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Originally Posted by Nachoman View Post
Crap. I wish zombie threads were easier to identify.
We keep asking for the original post date to be beside the OP's name under the thread title, just as it used to be, and we keep getting "we're working on it" every time. @IBThomas , @IBRyan . @IBobi how's it coming?
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Originally Posted by Deal4Fuji View Post
We keep asking for the original post date to be beside the OP's name under the thread title, just as it used to be, and we keep getting "we're working on it" every time. @IBThomas , @IBRyan . @IBobi how's it coming?
FYA, see this current thread, "Don't let newbies attach to dead threads,"
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