hi565

Hey everyone!

So pretty recently I was assigned the assignment to write a paper about freedom. At the time when I got the assignment I thought, ok I could maybe write about the berlin wall. But later I was speaking with a friend who helps me with papers and he said "Stop for a second, yes you can write about something that everyone else will write about or you can write about something you personally love" So after thinking about it for a second I thought. Huh, what about cycling?

So I went through the whole process of interviewing some people, and I also got some studies to help me along.

Below is the actual paper. The reason I am posting this is a) to see peoples responses and what they thought and b) because I think that there are people on this board who can really relate to this. So here it is:
(For everyone, if you want the paper you need to send me a PM and I will give it to you)
Thoughts?

(Just a side note, if you are having a problem with reading the paper, please tell me and I can figure out a way to get it to you. thanks)

Cycliste

Great work. I found your paper interesting till the end, by that I mean: towards the end. The part about Lance is well placed and relevant but too long and should not be the conclusion of your paper.

Think about a summary of all the parallels you made between cycling and freedom, and a punch line.

I would try also to seperate the paragraphs more, this is particularly true for internet ready (one paragraph per idea) but somehow relevent to paper reading.

hi565

What do you mean by seperate the paragraphs more?

As far as formatting...it is different slightly between what I printed out to hand in and what you see now. Thats just how it worked out.

hi565

oh by the way,

A little shout oout to Cuda2K and Also to ronH for helping me with getting the paper online!

oboeguy

PDF? The HTML version renders poorly in my browser.

hi565

Oh yes, i have that. Let me see if I can get that hosted.

Thanks

UmneyDurak

Tricky business posting papers on the net. Some software that checks papers for plagerism might tag it as plagerised when you submit it for grading.

hi565

Really,

Honestly I cant see in anyway how it is plagarism...I have a complete work cited and works consulted, I have everything that isnt mine footnoted.

UmneyDurak

I'm not saying you plagerised. I'm just saying now that it's on the internet someone else can use it, it will get reposted etc. Software that does checks crawls through sites building database of papers, so if yours is run through such a software it might be marked as plagerised even thought it isn't.

hi565

oh ****ing wonderful!

hi565

ok,

Now you have to PM me to get the link for the paper.

hi565

oboeguy

Yeah, good call, pull that thing until you've handed it in.

hi565

oh, btw, I have handed it in...So then its alright?

heh?